First Line Competition: Win a $100 Amazon Voucher

No editorial this week - instead a competition!


The first line of a story can be a tricky one. How do you start to hook people in without making the sentence convoluted or clunky?

Well have a go with the picture above. Leave the first line for a story inspired by the beach scene in the comments below to enter the competition.

First prize for the best wins a £50 or $100 Amazon voucher!

Closing date for entries Friday 13th June 08 .

Good Luck!


Photo Credit: Natasha Hirtzel

18 comments:

Mr. Grudge said...

Hi Mike,
I'll have a go at the competition. Based on your photo, I fumbled around and came up with this:

"The sunbathers enjoyed the calm beautiful day, unaware that sharks have been known to leap from the water and attack those is the shallow surf, just before a tsunami strikes the coastline."

Oh well, it's early yet and I haven't had the requisite amount of caffiene to wake up my brain cells. Good luck with the contest, mate. -Mike (M1)

JafaBrit's Art said...

It was a beautiful day for an anniversary, and to give thanks to Poseidon for sparing them on that terrible day at sea.

okey dokey, that was all I could come up with lol, besides "waiting for that babe to swim by again, soo hoo".

Anne said...

"It wasn't the time they spent together that mattered; it was the time spent apart that had the power to change it all."

I'm in :O)

aussiecynic said...

Hey Mike
love the photo and the distance between the ladies and the lack thereof of the men....

so heres my contribution:

"George do you think Martha has a clue?"
"No! John, and dont worry Margie wont say anything either, they aren't speaking cant you tell?"

Margorie and Martha being sister found plenty to disagree on and today was no exception.

There you go..... :)

JP33 said...

"Mary’s hair had laced across his feet, her tongue had caressed his toes that early evening back in ’48, after he had scored four straight sixes not out, James remembered; much as the soft wash of the waves was doing now."

Not sure if this is neither convoluted nor clunky, but the sea edge conjures up all sorts of wonderful openings for me, might have to use these for something else - what an inspiration!

Anonymous said...

Calm or rocky, they were there to prove a point. Nature wasn't going to beat them.

kathleenmaher said...

Wasn't it only a few years ago that Eleanor would cut nothing but stylies, big waves or small?

George said...

"Do you think the table will ever come back?"

GO! smell the flowers said...

Hi Mike,

We love the new look site so here we GO!

'After what the four of them had been through the crashing of the waves was the only thing they could really count on.'

Cheers!

Jane Turley said...

Here you go Mike;

"The chairs were sinking, of that there was no doubt, and with sighs of regret they acknowledged that soon they would have to haul their sorry arses back up the beach into the company of The Witches."

Jane Turley said...

Oh, might as well do some more...

"The dead fish floating on the surf reminded him of the headless Tommy, arms outstretched, spreadeagled on the beach at Omaha;it was a mistake to ever have thought he could come here."

"The sand was in his trunks making him itch even more; damn that bloody woman for insisting on a vascetomy."

Might think up some more yet.. any prizes for numerous entries?!

Mike French said...

Jane

No - but keep going - it is very entertaining! :-)

Jane Turley said...

Will do Mike...unfortunately I've got an itch in my pants at the moment.....

Linda said...

"The whales had returned. It must be summer."

Linda

Kevin said...

"The sun beat down on Canute's back for hours, but he didn't notice."

Niki said...

Years and experience had made them unapologetic survivors; now there were four, each carrying a secret they'd deposited into the sea.

theamateurbookblogger said...

"Did you see in the Herald this morning? Ten percent of all tsunamis occur in the Med."

hanoooooooo said...

(( i didn't know life outside the hospital can be boring! ) Ramzi said to me with no expectation that he will hear my ansewr.
(I knew that already, but i thought it is good for us to do what we are always advising our patients to do ,takeing some rest!!)